What do you think of my Mahalo page on Krav Maga?
I’m new to the claiming and building of pages and have been working on this Krav Maga page for a while. I found it as a neglected unclaimed page and what little content it had didn’t accurately represent this fighting system. Thus, I removed just about everything and created all new content from scratch.
Do you have any comments or suggestions?
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M$4 Answers
But I will not say here about your good points....now I will tell you some points for better...
#You did not linked any words!! It wondered me....you can see in every page...you will found some link especially in guide not section. Please link your page name with two brackets ...
here is a copy of a part of your page:
"Krav Maga is a brutally effective self-defense system designed to teach practitioners how to defend......"
Your should inlink "Karv maga" like this Karv Maga
#Jeffhoard said hisHow To Write A Guide Note page that
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"The top section of your Guide Note should be about 3 or 4 sentences."
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Because this three or four sentence are tracked by search engine like meta description if this sentences get 100% relevancy with your page, you will get a higher position.
Your top note is ok. But try to tell it in short.
# About your second para of guide note:
You should write here latest news and event which are relevant it....
But I saw your page's second paragraph is consists history of Karv Maga......You should move it in fast fact section and fill it with latest information about "Karv Maga".
When you will update this page next time again replace old information into fast fact and put here latest information.
#You did not put any featured video!!! but most page managers like to put featured video on the top on their page. A featured video can make your page more attractive. And it is cleaver idea putting a latest video of ralated it.
#Your guide note section is too long.....one may feel bore to read long top section. Please divide it into some particular text content and give a title of them.
I am saying that because your top note section should describe us what we are going to visit in your page. I agree with jeffhoard that try to give a basic overview in this section....No need to elaborate in top section...you should use "text object" feature of page builder to describe any topic...
Totally your page is very well but...I am saying that for more well.
experience and how to write a guide note.
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M$
Before > After
1 > 6
2 > 5
3 > 7
4 > 1
5 > 2
6 > 3
7 > 4
However, you know the topic better then I, so this is probably just a judgment call.
GREAT JOB!
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M$
I had never heard of this fighting style so it was interesting to read about it.
I'm new to building pages as well so I don't think I'm all that qualified to make suggestions how you might improve it.
But perhaps if you fixed a feature youtube vid at the top it might add some depth to your page.
I enjoyed taking a look, i learned something,which is always a plus.
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M$
I sent you a DM with a few suggestions, let me know if I confused you :D
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I agree with lesliec....I also suggest this him/her in my answer.
Thank you @lesliec for both this comment and your detailed direct message. I've done my best to comply and I think your input has helped me to significantly improve the page.
Thanks @lobo7922
Thanks. Per comments from you and @Lesliec I've shortened the initial guide note and moved the extra info into new sections, such as "Krav Maga Style" and "Krav Maga History". I've also added a featured video to the top of the page.
Yeah...just I proposed you...make new sections it will make your page more attractive.
I am felling happy to help a purple belt being a green belt. LOL
I think I will get you friendly for any help about mahalo...
Thanks again.
@safiqulislam
You also most welcome...